Monday, March 31, 2008

few more

feeling sleepy, when unsleeping
feeling lazy, without laziness
feeling tired, without tiredness
feeling sad clouds, in cloudless sky
feeling all remains, sun moves standard
feeling to be timeless, clock revolves around
feeling wisdom, anomalous to rule

facing mirror, nothing to change
facing ground, to avoid slippery
facing sky, shyness lacks looking high
facing world, my collected words
face dried and smooth, in natures breeze
facing oily fair, from melting oily hair

memories remain, no one can change
man I remain, nothing cost my brain
many times memory rain, even it drains
met each other, we were mates together
many occasions, we were together
morning dream, desert me
merged with memories, alike often it offers

monday morning, on some themes
made some lines, isolate smiles
moved far in miles, where minus measures plus
moving south to north, crossing miles
mirth island, oppose rising destination
making southwest wishes, northeast desires
mist around, missing the monuments
mirage glancing, glad my mind was dancing.

13 comments:

MARIA said...

Good luck to you!

vishesh said...

that was alround poem ;)

Ghost Particle said...

//memories remain, no one can change
man I remain, nothing cost my brain
many times memory rain, even it drains
met each other, we were mates together
many occasions, we were together
morning dream, desert me
merged with memories, alike often it offers//

i sense some sadness in this, but yet again your words are powerful. A nice read bro.

Keshi said...

aww beautifully sad and profound.

Keshi.

Ponniyinselvan said...

dear jeevan,
now-a-days, there is a note of sadness in your posts. there are 1000s and 1000s suffering like us.
come on cheer up.
sweetest karthikeyan

Shiva said...

Jeevan,

It is a wonderful and heartfelt poem. May be of a melancholy of a solitary reaper and not you. I know you are cheerful person.

Cheers
Shiva

krystyna said...

Really you are cheerful person Jeevan,
although the life is sometimes full of trouble.
Your poem plays upon ours heartstrings.

Wish you all the best!

G U R U said...

a melancholic strain, well expressed...nice work Jeevan..

Alok said...

poignant but beautiful ... very well done .... to me one of ur best work



Alok

Meghna said...

Hi Jeeva,
Wow! Awesome! I wish I could write like you...but I'm sure I've much to learn from you :D

priya said...

Good rhyming Jeevan. Sadness exists even when you feel more happy and in sadness u reveal your inner feelings better. U can never feel content coz ther is more of eagerness which makes us to feel sad coz certain things take time to succeed.

Azer Mantessa said...

i really like this one.

it's good :-)

Jeevan said...

Thanks so much dear buddies for your cherishing comments :) it encourages me to express and write more, all my wishes for you.

Welcome Meghna, very nice having you’re here, I wish you write more lovingly :)